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Fanfic Review: All bottled up one diretion fan fic

Type Of Story: 1D

Author: lillih_23

Story Rating Estimation: PG-13

Reads: 1,101

Votes: 27

Comments: ...

Description: When Nicolette starts dating Harry Styles from one direction she thinks her life couldn't possibly be more perfect. But when her violent ex starts threatens to kill harry things get a little complicated. Will her secret past come back to haunt her? And to make matters worse she has a secret admirer in the band. Who is it? How will things between her ex go?

Suggested If: you want to read a Harry fic

My Review: The plot is extremely clichè and honestly jumps all over the place. Also, all of the POV changes are very difficult to keep up with. Your chapter lengths are a little short, but they're okay, and your grammar and spelling needs a lot of work. Your sentences are choppy, you need to learn how to space dialogue, and you mix up your/you're and there/their/they're a lot. Overall, I'd definitely edit this story. (PS: you spelt 'one direction' wrong in the title).

Note to Author: I'd edit!

Rating (0-5): 1

Other Note: I stumbled upon your story through the Wattpad reading lists and decided to review it :)