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Fanfic Review: Idiots(Luke Hemmings Fanfic)

Type Of Story: 5SOS

Author: rachylstirwin2

Story Rating Estimation: PG-13

Reads: 959

Votes: 168

Comments: ...

Description: Zoe Irwin is an 18 year old girl who is the sister of Ashton Irwin from 5 seconds of summer. Even with a brother who is part of a famous band, her life is pretty normal. But will her life turn inside out when she goes on tour with her brother and meets his friends for the first time?

Suggested If: you want to read a Luke fic

My Review: The plot is extremely clichè and goes by incredibly fast. Also, Luke is gullible as hell if he believes someone just because they say "yes" or "no" to something. Your chapter lengths are okay and your grammar and spelling isn't the worst, but you mix up your/you're and there/their/they're and you also write some pretty choppy sentences. I know it's your first fic, but I'd edit a lot!

Note to Author: Trust me, almost nobody's first fic is good

Rating (1-5): 1

Other Note: I stumbled upon your story through the Wattpad reading lists and decided to review it :)