[CLOSED] WoF OC Reviews

Ulexite;; IceWing OC

Anyone else remember when I actually wrote long introductions?

Thanks to Melladoe for submitting their OC.

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BASIC INFORMATION;;
------ Name: Ulexite.
I had to look up what this meant; beautiful word.

------ Age: 17.
Nice - we need some adult OCs.

------ Gender: Female.
------ Sexuality: Straight.
------ Tribe: Pureblooded IceWing.
Nothing wrong with that. IceWings are always interesting to read.

------ Abilities: Everything a normal IceWing has - ice breath, serrated claws, and (obviously) the ability to withstand below-zero temperatures.
Nice and normal.

------ Relationship Status: In a relationship.
With?

------ Occupation: Queen Marble of the SkyWings' Top Fighter.
Ooo, this is interesting. I'd love to know how an IceWing ended up fighting for the SkyWings.

------ Family: Ulexite can only remember her mother, father, and brother, since she hasn't seen the rest of her affinity in so long. Her mother, Eira, was very accepting and loving for an IceWing. Her father, Walrus, was challenging, but had an ironically warm heart when regarding his daughter. Ulexite's brother, Drift, was always competitive with his sister - always wanting to catch the most seals during hunts.
This is great! I like the details you've provided - instead of just listing names and stating facts, you've given me a brief orientation of sorts into Ulexite's day-to-day life.

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PHYSICAL DESCRIPTION;;
Ulexite has pale blue scales that fade into white. Spikes run all along her spine and tail. She has a few scars. Ulexite doesn't have more than that due to her excessive amount of training, agility, and strength, which rarely lets her opponent get close enough to mark her. Her eyes are cobalt blue with lighter hues in them.
Interesting, interesting. I can't see anything wrong with this. She sounds like a very pretty dragon.

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------ Strengths: Ulexite is a naturally talented fighter, which makes her fit in well with the SkyWings around her.
Nothing wrong with natural ability.

------ Weaknesses: She always feels guilty after killing a dragon in the arena. If she's caught acting guilty after an arena battle, she is deprived of a day's worth of meals by Queen Marble. Marble believes that, as her arena champion, Ulexite should learn to feel no guilt. Also, in the rare occasion she is placed against an IceWing (this has happened only twice in her ten years in the SkyWing Kingdom) Ulexite will hesitate in killing them for obvious reasons.
That's not necessarily a weakness - at least, not until you point out that she or someone else considers it so. I'm a tad concerned about Queen Marble - she sounds a bit like a Scarlet.

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BACKSTORY;;
When Ulexite made it into the Second Circle after turning 7, she was sent to the Southern Border to be on watch alone, for the first time in her life.
For the first time of her life? That's a bit intense. Surely if she was in the Second Circle she'd have performed similar duties at some point? Either way, I don't think she'd be alone - solitary border/outpost guarding is typically reserved to dragons in the lower circles. Unless she's an exceptional military asset or being punished for some reason, it's unlikely that she'd be alone: more likely, she'd have a troop of some sort.