By: @tongue-tiedd
Title: Mmm...I'm not a big fan of the title...Sure it gets my interests, but something that I've never liked about stories here on Wattpad is when they give it a very cliche title...I feel like you're giving something away already from the bad boy and the princess, you know? I think you can come up with a better title than this.
Summary: I'm going to be honest and say that I thought your summary was going to give more away being that your title kinda does it for me...but although in a way your summary is a little predictable, it does get my attention. On the first paragraph though, make sure to capatilize the first letter of a sentence and the name 'Cas'.
Storyline: The storyline is good. I like how you're talking about something and you explain about it, but then go back to what you were talking before.
Detail: The detail is goodl, I can imagine everything you're writing.
Word of Choice: For this, I feel like you use some big terms, but not so many. Don't use commong words such as say, shock, complain etc.
Grammar: I've said before...I'm not grammar expert, but I do believe you overuse your commas where it's not necessary to put. A little tip I'll give you is this: Whenever you're about to update, read your story aloud before you post and pause on every comma for just a slight second and see where it sounds off when you pause.
Character's Personality: I know you barely have two chapters, but it's really hard for me to pinpoint exactly what kind of person Castiela is...the only one who I can tell you is an asshole, seems quiet arrogant, and rude would be Skylar. You portrayed his character good...but Castiela not so much. What kind of person is she? Is she mean, sarcastic, bubbly, outgoing etc.
Creativity: You're creative! I mean, your story has really good detail in which I can imagine, you managed to make soul mates without having the characters be vampire or warewolves, and some of the stuff you write is funny!
Length in Chapter: The length of both of your chapters are alright...I mean four I don't consider very long...but you're getting there. I don't like when someone posts a chapter and it's one or two pages long. I mean, when I read a published book it's not one or two pages long...and although it's Wattpad where you're publishing your story, just think if you had the opportunity to publish your story and it was only four pages long each chapter...Mmm..I can't really consider that a chapter.
I add to reading list: I'm a big fan of Romance stories...but I wouldn't add your story to my reading ilst. I'm just very picky when it comes to that. Your story is not bad, but if I want to read about soulmates I have stories on my reading list that get my attention. Don't take this to heart, I mean you barely have two chapters. Who knows? Maybe a month from now you'll be on the Popular List and I'll have your story then on my reading list...But I do see potential in this story so keep writing and doing what you love!
I gave you a point for the following:
Title-0
Summary-1
Storyline-1
Detail-1
Word of Choice-.5
Grammar-1
Character's Personality-.5
Creativity-1
Length in Chapter-0
Add to reading list-0
Total = 6
I rate your story a 6!
*Keep in mind that to me your story is a 6, but to others it could be a 10!
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