By: @AthenaShakespeare
Title: The title (@Love Scenes) is weird....I think you can be more creative then that. Your title kind of seems very disorganize and it could somewhat scare readers from wanting to read your story. I would recommend to keep your title either simple and short or both.
Summary: The summary was good. I liked the fact that you were somewhat promoting it yet telling the reader what to expect.
Storyline: The flow is good! You don't get off track when you're talking about a certain topic.
Detail: Your detail is amazing! Good job! Always make sure to describe everything you're writing because it lets the reader imagine what you're writing and that's way better than watching a movie!
Word Of Choice: I always notice that those who are very detail use a lot of vocabulary. You being one of them!
Grammar: Your grammar was good...there were a few errors here and there, but nothing that can confuse the reader when reading.
Character's Personality: I can easily tell the personalities of both Jamie and Dakota. Jamie is serious, friendly, yet cares for Dakota (you really do good in showing this.) Dakota I find her friendly, yet naïve at the same time.
Creativity: The creativity is good. Personally me, I would much rather write something that isn't already known to people, but I like the fact that you put a twist to a story/movie that is already out there.
Length In Chapter: Majority of your chapters are long and I really appreciate that! Short chapters are not something that (50 Shades of Grey) fans would want.
I Add To Reading List: I'll give you the point even though I won't be adding it to my list. Why? Well I'm not a huge 50 Shades of Grey fan, but the story is well written and anybody who is a fan would really appreciate in wanting to read your fanfic!
I Gave You A Point For The Following:
Title – 0
Summary – 1
Storyline – 1
Detail – 1
Word Of Choice – 1
Grammar – 1
Character's Personality – 1
Creativity – 1
Length In Chapter – 1
I Add To Reading List – 1
Total = 9
I Rate Your Story a 9!
*Keep in mind that to me your story is a 9, but to others it could be a 10!
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