By: @EssaSerania
Title: The title is good. I like how Haven is an artist, and I can interpret her name as heaven and heaven being "skyblue"...so I get that.
Summary: The summary...it doesn't appeal to me to want to read your story and it's not because you mentioned 'this story doesn't end with a happy ending'. It doesn't catch my attention because you're not really saying what the story is going to be about. I mean sure you mention the story is perhaps going to be an unhappy love story, but what of it? How is your story special from other tragic ending stories? I would probably fix this summary.
Storyline: Reading the first chapter made me feel like it was being rushed. The protagonist was going from one place to another....and I kind of felt like you really didn't take your time to write that chapter. What I would suggest to you is to separate paragraphs whenever you're moving to another scene.
Detail: You lack detail. It was clear to me because like I told you on the storyline, I felt like you're rushing from scene to scene, without really describing anything.
Word of Choice: You need to use more synonyms and not so common words.
Grammar: There were a few grammar errors on the chapters I read. You might want to read your story out loud before you publish it and see if it makes sense.
Character's Personality: I've been reading your story but I still don't get what kind of character Haven is...The only thing I know is that she likes art and does that as a hobby...I think you might want to work on her character and give her a unique personality.
Creativity: Mmm...I'll probably give you half a point for this only because it's my first time ever reading of a character liking art....but other than that, I don't really get the point of the story. Your summary didn't help in giving me a clear picture either.
Length in chapter: Too short.
I add to Reading List: No. Your grammar and storyline ruin it for me...You need to work on that. It's too rushed, it's not well written, and there's nothing that catches my attention.
I gave you a point for the following:
Title – 1
Summary – 0
Storyline – 0
Detail – 0
Word of Choice – 0
Grammar – .5
Character's Personality – .5
Creativity – .5
Length in chapter – 0
I add to Reading List – 0
Total = 2.5
I rate your story a 2.5!
*Keep in mind that to me your story is a 2.5, but to others it could be a 10!

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