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Angelien Kirsten Hera Visser

Submitted by: @Skynide33

Reviewed by: thief_queen

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Fandom or O.W.: Original

Name: Angelien Kirsten Hera Visser
That's quite a mouthful, very pretty though!

Plot: As of right now it's about children who are prodigies and they are under a system and they face struggles and learn.
Hmm, I'm not too sure if this is the entire story or if you just haven't developed it enough, because as of right now, I have no clue what the climax would be.

Age: 11
Dang! Only eleven?! I hope you do realize that most readers will read their age and up, but generally don't tend to read below their age... just something to keep in mind.

Race: European (Half Dutch, half Norwegian)

Background: She comes from a rich family on both sides and they have a history of aristocracy and they've succeeded because they passed their intelligence down from generations. Her parents are both smart philanthropists who have become well known to have a business that helps other prodigies in their knowledge and inventing technologies and products that help others. They wanted their daughter to become a prodigy just like them, when they were young, because they saw her potential. She's been taught advanced things at a young age by her parents and peers. She has a cousin who is 4 years older than her and what he learned in his grade level he teaches to her too. Angel's knowledge and comprehension skills enhanced because of this and she became a smart girl for her age. She was also taught proper manners and to be a good girl. Her family instilled in her the value of being good to get her higher in life and to have morals. However because of her status and desire to learn and expand her knowledge Angel has come to dislike ordinariness and average class things. She's not perfect because she has a limit in her learning capacity and she can't take too much cramming or peer pressure. She wants to be the best but even if she's not number 1 it's fine with her as long as she's one of the top students. She's quite pragmatic but she still likes lavish things that help in something to expand further. Her goal in life is to be a well known child prodigy and inspire kids below 12 to know more and know that despite their age they can do greater things and be extraordinary.
I actually quite like her background! I think it's because she hasn't had to desperately claw her way to the top... and I know that makes a good story-line too, but this one isn't seen as often.

Talents: Dancing, psychological manipulation, math and science, answering philosophical questions, expanding ideas and turning them into something creative, being a leader.

Sexuality: Straight

S/o: Lucas Janssen (this boy had a crush on her at the age of 5 and became her boyfriend at the age of 6. Their relationship was happy and he made her know what it's like to love someone, he was her source of inspiration and he helped expand her knowledge but he died on her 9th birthday and that left her depressed and traumatized)
... Why are they dating at the age of six? I don't know, I really don't like that plot point for some reason. Maybe it'd be better if they were just really good friends, and if she looks back on it enough, she realizes that they could've become lovers... again, just my opinion.

Appearance: Tall for her age, has platinum blonde hair and icy blue eyes, she's fair skinned but looks paler than normal because of her anemia, dresses her best when needed
I would say that I'm not too happy because she has almost no physical flaws, but seeing as though she's higher class, I kind of don't expect there to be any.

Distinguishing features: Her eyes are a very icy shade of blue and she looks like the typical pretty blonde girl which make people judge her easily because she doesn't always smile

Habits: She has a strange habit of putting ice in her mouth and letting it melt when she finishes a beverage with ice, if she likes someone she'll change some things about herself and won't show her bad habits so said person can be comfortable around her and she tries to relate to their interests but this can sometimes make her come off as two-faced or insecure
OK BUT THE FIRST ONE IS ACTUALLY ME.

Mental Illnesses: Mild PTSD because of some trauma in her past and once she's angered and it worsens it can lead her to get violent and her desire for revenge will increase
To be honest, I hate that. I really don't like the PTSD thing in her scenario. Feels forced and romanticized.

Self confidence level: It varies, when she feels really proud she may come off as a bit arrogant (even if she doesn't mean to) but when low she gets depressed and it's kind of hard to talk with her
Ok, that's pretty realistic. I don't know about the depressed part but it could work.

Ruled by emotions/logic or a mix: 75% logic and 60% emotion, when mixed it's either a benefit or a tragedy
Uh, what. 75 + 60 = 135 ???

Extrovert
GOOD. I HAVE NOT SEEN MANY EXTROVERTS.

Strengths: Intelligence, her family's money and assets, she studied psychology and philosophy so she can read some people well, analytical nature, innovative mind, plans ahead of time, influence on others that like her

Weaknesses: Arrogance (sometimes), her anemia, can be somewhat apathetic to people she dislikes or has no interest in, her dislike for average and ordinariness can lead her to feel inadequate, can be mean when angered
I love the second-to-last one.

Extra notes:

- Despite her flaws she means well and is actually kind

- She's modest and she dislikes wearing skirts because she feels naked
@ me.

- Her family, friends, and her deceased first love motivate her to strive harder and to achieve her goal

- She desires for greater things to help her and others but knows when enough is enough.

- She can come off as arrogant because of her pride in being a child prodigy even when she doesn't mean to.

- She can be like the goddess Hera when angered and desires revenge but if she can't then she'll use it for another time or let it go.

- When angered she can be mean and will be a smart*** just to make you feel bad about yourself or if her anger is really justified then she'll get a little physical and will berate you for your mistake.

- Because of her issues when angered she tries hard to keep calm and hide that side of her.

- She is choosy about the people she hangs out with but is accepting and will be your friend if your lonely.

- She hides her bad side and tries to tame it down.

- She will adjust for you if she really likes you but expects you to do the same even just a little if you become close to her or if your decent acquaintances that enjoy each other's company.

- She speaks in a professional tone and uses big words if the person she's talking to has her level of intelligence.

- She finds a dictionary much more interesting to read than a story novel or any fictional book. She'd rather see them in a movie.
I actually really like this note about her.

- She is a good leader and her suggestions help others out.

- She gets her skills from her parents and family members because they're all smart and good in business.

- Some people at first glance don't really like her when first meeting her because she gives off an arrogant or not so pleasant aura.

- She cares about her family and friends and will help them when she can.

- Her older cousin is protective of her and instills modesty and good moral values to her because he loves her and wants her to turn out good.

- People have mixed opinions about her attitude.

Constructive Criticism: I guess there's only two things about her that I really don't like. The really young relationship and the PTSD thing. Personally I wouldn't give her PTSD (for reasons already mentioned) and I think I already said my opinions on what I'd do about the young lovebird thing.

Intrigue: 82%