GracieONeil

I was going to ask YOU!!  Between writing and seminars my brain's full. :-)

fatpigeon

Hi, Gracie. This is pretty good. I was going to review it but there isn't much room for advising improvement. The characters are strong and well drawn, the language tight and compelling. Maybe when there's more I can add another comment, but well done so far.
          FP

GracieONeil

Thanks fatpigeon. I really appreciate your getting in touch, and your comments. :-) I'll normally only put up a part once a week, but I've decided to do a bit more this week as it is my first time and I want to help people get a feel for the story. So after my work is done ... LOL
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