Hey! Your book The Star Princess is pretty good so far, the only thing I can say is work on your capital letters and punctuation! I don’t mean to at all sound like a teacher, but this is just one of my triggers so I had to point it out Like when you said something like “There will be many chapters. I Hope!” Don’t put a full stop there, instead put a coma like this “There will be many chapters, I hope!” It’s a lot better to do that other wise with full stops you are ending a sentence and then starting a new one! And then just remember to put capital letters on names like where you put “max” it should have been “Max”. I hope this helped, bye!
