its okay... for me cuz idk who u writing abt (ik that its from got7 doe [ i mean, its stated up there^]) you should add like __(idk whats the word)__ but like for example the girl is her long lost sis and the long lost sis hates her cuz she stole her childhood boyfriend(FOR EXAMPLE) then they immediately patch up and became BFFs (as if its ever possible...) so like 'pull' some of the scenes to make your story longer and whilst doing that, you could even add a plot twist or smt to make ur story even longer and interesting but just dont confuse the reader can liao :) (i am trying to give suggestions so its okay if u dun follow what-so-ever) DONT delete the book at all costs, just find a random editor and ask her to edit haha jk (thats what i did btw dun follow) you can un-publish it and try to make it better [according to the p5 chinese syllabus where that old man ordered his student to fill the barrel with stuff then pour water in it.. waittt is that p5 or p6? its just basically saying that everything needs room for improvement (ya know, kinda there)]
jia you! you can do it :)
-erin, ur (umm idk?) friend/senior [dayum that one makes me sound old]
p.s. you nvr told me the dates of the finals for that dam netball finals but its okay, i wasnt free on that day either
p.p.s. mirabel was pissed cuz of that but its okay too(shes not pissed anymore)