Nikki

(Pt.5) 
            Just a final note,the ending sucked a bit.Like I’m glad she got her happy ending (even though I have my problems with the story) BUT his narcissism still shows even in the end.
            He wants HER to move to NYC with him so HE can study,no regard whatsoever to what SHE actually wants then Miss Weak of the year just follows him like a lost little dog??
            Absolutely no standard for sis.
            I believe in forgiveness,I truly think that the word without forgiveness is doomed BUT with forgiveness comes accountability.She not once held him accountable for his actions (and saying “you took advantage of me” then quickly moving on from it does not count). There should have been hesitation on her part,time for her to heal and mature in my opinion x

(Pt.4)
            
            ALSO BACK TO THE MUM- she’s actually slow but I’ll give her a bit of a break cause she had a kid when she was one too BUT..your kid asks what rape is and you don’t pick up on the fact that maybe something happened? Then ‘coincidentally’ weeks after that conversation she tells you she’s pregnant by her BULLY and it STILL doesn’t click? Like you have to be next level dense to not put two and two together and ontop of that,later in the book,he basically ghosts your daughter knowing she’s pregnant but when he comes to your door you basically hand her new address to him on a silver platter?? Get up,no one in this book (maybe aside from Cassandra) actually protected the MC though Cassanra is also not that redeemable but she gets a pass cause she’s new to the town and she stuck by MC when no one else did.
            
            I’ve read your other works,they’re SO good (Drunken Mistake being my personal favourite) This one had the potential to be just as good but you really did not write it well,I read the book prior to you taking it down or whatever so that’s how I know what I’m on about plus someone reloaded it.

(Pt.3)
            
            The story itself has SO MUCH potential.You just sucked at writing it.Not only are there so many plot holes of how graduation is coming up yet they did not even at least write exams or something.Then also the plot about her grandparents??I get that they want to “raise” her and all but A) why didn’t the mom go with her? B) If they were so rich,why didn’t they just help them out financially? Especially considering the mom had the MC when she was 15 so the grandparents would have been legally obligated to help her out but anyways 
            
            Another issue is definitely the plot with the MC’s dad. 1) He’s a pedo,no sugar coating that.His married self slept with and impregnated a 14/15 year old girl. 2) He’s a bum,how are you gonna willingly skip out on your child’s life because her mom said “no”?? Especially considering you live in the same small town. Like I get (very partially) the mom’s reasoning for not wanting him in the baby’s life but he was the grown up.HE should have made the calls to A) get himself locked up B) Help the mom out,not just abandon a 15 year old?? Also, the dad is horrible at being a father to Hannah too cause when MC told him Hannah was bullying her his reaction was simply “sigh,that girl..” NO,you hold your child accountable and DISCIPLINE them,not just brushing it off.

@JessicaBaker949859  agreed!!!