sidra_knox

@XXPRINCESSOFDARKNESS oh ok. Thanks for the update!!!

sidra_knox

@emmitomlinsonx I started reading my crushes killer. I have a few comments if you don't mind. Personally I'm not one of those people who like to be given the plot in advance. Just my opinion. I like to figure it out and see what happens. The idea of the story is given in the description of the book. Not in the actual book. Also I'm confused a little on how you write. Firstly, being the picky writer as I am, I notice you don't capitalize all your sentences or use commas....like EVER. Also, is this sharing the past or the present? And is the narrator, which is you, part of the story? It makes it seem like you are by the way you describe things. If you don't want to be the person who is actually in the story maybe you should stop describing people using "like". Like when you said "she was like the prettiest girl" you make it seem like you actually are in the story. I hope I didn't offend you. It was just my opinion. I hope it helped!