sharmaine28xx

Hi guys! I'm printing statement shirts and shirts na may quotes. Some lines are from songs, movies, and books. Pwede rin namang kayo ang magprovide ng design na ilalagay sa shirt. If you guys are interested, kindly message me here na lang so we can talk about the details:) Thank you guys!

sharmaine28xx

Hi guys! I'm printing statement shirts and shirts na may quotes. Some lines are from songs, movies, and books. Pwede rin namang kayo ang magprovide ng design na ilalagay sa shirt. If you guys are interested, kindly message me here na lang so we can talk about the details:) Thank you guys!

Striving8

Hi!
          
          Would you care to read my book?
          I know that you might like it.
          
          
          http://www.wattpad.com/story/19730506-the-last-king
          
          I hope that you take the time out to read my book, The Last King.
          Would love your feed back on it.
          
          Wattpad code- 60752625
          
          Striving8
          
          
          Are you interested in music?

sharmaine28xx

*privileged.sorry
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sharmaine28xx

Hi there! I'm done reading the prologue of your story, I apologize if I don't really have the time to read each chapter. However, one of the things I observed in your story is that you have a good idea or the story, though it was not written quite well on the prologue. There are sentences wherein the idea is somewhat confusing since you are compressing the thoughts in just one sentence. One tip, don't forget to use punctuation marks to organize your thoughts. 
            I really don't know how you will take this comment from me, but please remember that this is a constructive criticism to help you in writing stories. Lastly, I am not perfect so if you think that I have mistakes in the observations I made, feel free to tell me so that we  can both learn from this.
            I would also like to express my gratitude since you asked me to read your story, for that  I feel priviledged. Thank you! :)
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