ljkastermans

Second Chapter of The Witches Vengeance up now!!!

AshantiDaquan

Thank you for your comments.
          I was just wondering if you felt there was anything I could improve on?

AshantiDaquan

@ljkastermans Thank you
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ljkastermans

@AshantiDaquan, the only things that stood out were grammar, spelling and syntax - but, these are small things in the grand scheme! Personally when I get to the editing phase is when I worry about these things, and I run it through Grammarly! Otherwise, keep doing what you're doing!
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BookBirdy2404

I saw that you're writing a werewolf book. Mind checking out mine? It's called Lake Sirel. The first part is terrible but the second is a lot better!
          
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          In this book, you'll meet Morgan. 
          
          Three times. 
          
          Each time you meet her, she'll have no idea the previous times existed. Which is a shame, because she meets a hottie named Grey, his enchanting friends Sarah and Molly, his little brother Tyler, sometimes a rich CEO named Derek, and Derek and Sarah's cute little girl named Amber. She'll also meet a tribe, or a group of badass woman working to take down the existence of werewolves and anything that opposes them. But Morgan doesn't know that right away. She thinks she's just on some vacation at a lodge on Lake Sirel. And that she's human.
          
          But every time, she's drawn to Grey. There's something dark about his aurora, something looming. He's hesitant and distant towards her at first, but every time when Morgan needs him the most, he swoops in to play the knight in shining armor. After all, everybody wants to see her blood. She may be the key to an ancient prophecy. 
          
          But what about when it's time for the damsel in distress to put on the armor?

ljkastermans

I find the same thing with my “parts”, the second always comes together a lot nicer! I’ll definitely give your book a go, I’m finding the description very intriguing’
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ljkastermans

I find the same thing with my “parts”, the second always comes together a lot nicer! I’ll definitely give your book a go, I’m finding the description very intriguing’
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ljkastermans

I’ll definitely give it a look! I’ve found the same with my story parts! My “second” part (1.5) is going a lot better than my first!
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