lakenaudrey

I am almost finished with the next chapter!  I can't wait for you all to read it but I want some feed back! What are your predictions about Auden, Boyd, and most importantly at the moment, Ryder? What do you see happening for them in the next few chapters? love you all! don't forget to recommend and vote!

lakenaudrey

I am almost finished with the next chapter!  I can't wait for you all to read it but I want some feed back! What are your predictions about Auden, Boyd, and most importantly at the moment, Ryder? What do you see happening for them in the next few chapters? love you all! don't forget to recommend and vote!

ThatSelm

By the way. When separating paragraphs think like.
          
          When she thinks about eating carrots (hypothetically) she talks about smell, taste, sight. You make a new paragraph when she talks bout actually taking a bite and how crunchy it is. 
          
          And then another if you detailed how it smelt like the ground of fresh mud and dirt.
          
          And the sight. The jagged pieces of just peeling it and how the middle is more orange than the rest.
          
          When your separating dialect. If character A. Says something and then uses and action and then character B also does an action. And then character A says something else. You split that paragraph up after character B does the action. And then continue the next paragraph with what character A had to say. 
          
          But if character A says something and then acts it, but character B acts and then says something. You split it up after character A does its actions. 
          
          Another thing. Say character A says something and then does an action, but you really want to detail it. First paragraph. 
          
          "I really like you." Jeff looked me right in the eyes, I swore I was gonna melt. 
          
          Next one.
          
          Just the way Jeff stared at me, the blue in his eyes. The narrowness of his nose. How his teeth were ever so white.
          
          You want to make the paragraphs kind of small. Not really like paragraphs but more like sections. When people read then dont want to scroll down big ole sections. They want breaks. They know the mood will change.