Wolfcrazy003

Hello Author,
          The storyline is good, but lot of grammar mistakes and you keep switching between I and the person’s name a lot in the same sentence. I think you have to decide how you want the reader to read your story meaning if it’s the person’s POV or the author’s . Keep writing and eventually you will get the hang of it. All the Best!!

juveriashaikh1

@Wolfcrazy003 thank you my sister also told the same way soon I will edit it  my story but keep reading it ❤️
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Annieviz

Will you be updating the story pls... I lpve thw story and there's very few Indian BL stories

juveriashaikh1

@Annieviz   thanks  you so much you too take care and yeah I will surely update ❤️
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Annieviz

@juveriashaikh1 oh sweetie, all the best for your studies... Pls do concentrate on your studies now and you can update the story later... Pls take care and stay safe ❤️
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juveriashaikh1

@Annieviz , hello thank you for liking my story and of course I will be updating my story as I'm busy in my 12 grade studies but OMG  thank you for your feedback I love u so muchhj❤️❤️
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