foreons-

hi!!!
          i noticed you recently added my tsukasa x oc book to your reading list (god bless you fam) and it's just like a fyi moment lol:
          
          the book you added: passing thoughts, is actually the oneshot(s) collection of my book WONDERLAND which is a tsukasa x oc (the oc is same with one in passing thoughts)
          
          welp, i'll show myself out (8 
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foreons-

 ah thank you for the long critique! i'll be sure to use somd of your ideas! :)
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cythine

@foreons- of course  as you said the plot isn't rlly steady but it isn't that there isn't a plot. I think if you fix a few things then it would make the plot better but otherwise the plot in general has a pretty good idea. Also I feel like there should be  more Eishi involvement in the story. I'm not sure if you had an idea of saving him for later but that was what I was thinking of. I kinda feel like that flashback of Eishi was rlly nice and there should be more so that leading up to the Eishi parts would be easier  Of course as the author of the book you have all the rights to ignore what I wrote and think of your own and I wish you many many luck in writing the book!!
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foreons-

ahhh!! thank you for reading! and can i ask a favor? could you just tell me of what you thought of the plot and characters? because the reason i haven't been updating this book much is because i'm not really clear on what  developments characters should have, and that the plot doesn't feel as solid as it is — more each chapter is a different story in the same universe. it'd be great if you could just tell me your opinion on it, as long as that isn't too much trouble :)
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Tigzy435

Thanks for following me! :D means a lot :)

Tigzy435

@cythine No problem!! :D
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cythine

@Tigzy435 Yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you!!!!!!!
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Tigzy435

@cythine Thanks, I shall work on it tomorrow just for you :) <3
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