The_Silenced_Cat
Sorry to bother but... Izzy has long black hair with purple tips my dude. You... You got that wrong in Jack's story... Just saying :/
The_Silenced_Cat
Hey friend, nice first chapter, just a recommendation from a fellow writer, try to add more depth and description, also be sure to spell check! I saw a lot of mistakes, just putting it out there. You're off to a good start! Keep it up!
SladerProductions
@The_Silenced_Cat Thanks for the tip about the spell check....otherwise I will work on that however, this is something I'm doing for fun and not something that i'm actually committed to doing as of yet