RavenAkuma

Don't want to sound dramatic, but this is possibly the last announcement you'll see from me. I've been dead so long, doubt anyone will care, but I thought I'd say it anyway. I've put the reason why in my bio.

RavenAkuma

Hi. Right now I'm mainly active on Young Writer's Society. It's where I've gotten the best and most useable feedback for my story, and I'm even dipping into the social realm with roleplays and clubs and stuff, and this is probably the first time it's been fun (and the people are a lot less critical/more welcoming of newbies lol).
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Jenni_thewolffaunus

@Raven Akuma it’s a shame you’re leaving, though I totally understand I feel as if my stories aren’t really getting much traction now either, but where else are you posting so I can continue to read your stuff?
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RavenAkuma

Don't want to sound dramatic, but this is possibly the last announcement you'll see from me. I've been dead so long, doubt anyone will care, but I thought I'd say it anyway. I've put the reason why in my bio.

RavenAkuma

Hi. Right now I'm mainly active on Young Writer's Society. It's where I've gotten the best and most useable feedback for my story, and I'm even dipping into the social realm with roleplays and clubs and stuff, and this is probably the first time it's been fun (and the people are a lot less critical/more welcoming of newbies lol).
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Jenni_thewolffaunus

@Raven Akuma it’s a shame you’re leaving, though I totally understand I feel as if my stories aren’t really getting much traction now either, but where else are you posting so I can continue to read your stuff?
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lilshadowwolf

OMG, I like never find anyone who has heard of D. Grey-Man. It's like one of my favorites!!

lilshadowwolf

@RavenAkuma I agree it's underappreciated. Thank you, you do too :D. 
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RavenAkuma

@lilshadowwolf Same, it's such an underappreciated anime!! You have good taste, my friend lol
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RavenAkuma

I have a quick CHARACTER DESIGN QUESTION, open to everyone...
          
          Imagine this character. Young male, tan skin, and pointed ears. Ice-blue eyes that often become a focus point in descriptions. Dark blue hair, the back in a low ponytail. Relatively simple clothes, mainly with a black and dark green palette.
          
          He also has a maroon, relatively intricate tattoo that takes up most of his left cheek. This also becomes a focal point, in some parts of the story.
          
          Do you have a good visual of this character? Now that you do, would it be TOO MUCH to add a mask to his design? For lack of a better comparison, the type you would see on a ninja. 
          
          I mean, this guy already has a comparatively large tattoo on his face, which in itself has significance to the story...At the same time, he's a thief-type character that relies heavily on stealth, so a mask may be fitting.
          
          What is your vote? 
          
          - Mask makes sense, go for it!
          or
          - Mask is too much, leave it off!

RavenAkuma

@Saruman8974 The full mask is interesting, I'll probably play around with that. Thanks for sharing your opinion! :)
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Saruman8974

@RavenAkuma I could see a mouth cover mask working with this character, sort of like the protagonist from Watchdogs 1, although if he was wearing a full mask  there could be opportunities for a  dramatic scene where he reveals his tattoo.
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RavenAkuma

I have a spoiler-free character design question, and would love all opinions! 
          
          On a side note, sorry I've been so quiet lately! Believe it or not, I'm still busy doing revisions of action scenes in the TFR series. As I've mentioned before, the story is still totally in place, but you'll find the fights much more...intense ;)
          
          So, I have a character who's becoming more important in my series, and though I don't have a picture of her at this time, this is her description: she is an Aubade Sylph, meaning a mortal with an extremely pale skin tone and long, pointed ears. She is about in her thirties, built slightly tall and muscular, and she's a soldier. She has brown eyes and long silver hair that she keeps tied in a ponytail, with standard bangs. She wears violet-tinted armor with a very dark gray skin-tight undersuit. She carries a longsword with a slight lavender sheen (the colors of her tribe's flag are purple and white/silver).
          
          I want to give her a little redesign to go with her evolution, and the idea is that she becomes much edgier. Some ideas I had were adding a vibrant red sash to her armor (though I hesitate because red is the emblematic color of her enemies), or I could add some gold trim to the armor. I was especially in a tossup about her hair; should I just take it out of a ponytail, add some accessories, or even make it shorter? How short, if I cut it? 
          
          Let me hear your ideas, and I'll try to post a chibi drawing of the before and after! Sorry I can't handle anything more than chibis...Although, if you happen to like the chibi art, I am open to requests (note: the chibi icon in my profile pic is very outdated, so don't use that for a reference, lol)
          
          Anyway, I look forward to hearing your ideas. Happy writing! :)

RavenAkuma

@Jenni_thewolffaunus I love the gold cracks idea! And I think I could do some red on her gauntlets, so that way she sees it whenever she holds her weapon. The half-shaved idea will be interesting too, I can see that working on her. I'll try to draw this out soon and see. Thanks for the suggestions :)
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Jenni_thewolffaunus

@RavenAkuma there’s a style of Japanese artistry where you add gold into cracks of broken pottery. It’s to show how brokenness can be beautiful (I believe anyway) so maybe if she has cracks in her armor that’s where the gold can be. As for the red. Maybe put it somewhere she can always see it. So she remembers her goal of who she’s fighting. If you want to. And for hair. I’ve been loving half shaved looks recently. 
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RavenAkuma

*When the most challenging part of your writing project is the fight scenes and you finally get complimented on them after years of trying to improve them.* It was so minor and I don't want this to be taken as bragging, but that made my day 
          
          Of course I'm looking for tips and opinions on all factors of my work, and I encourage all feedback whether it's critical or not, but there are some specifics that just really sit with you (kind of like some of the negative comments), you know? lol.

RavenAkuma

So, kind of a heavy subject, but you guys might've noticed an update to the first of the TFR books. Following an anonymous request, I decided to post a short list of "warnings" for some themes that the book entails. Some of these themes I didn't find bothersome enough to post a warning initially (jeez that says a lot about me), which is why this is only coming up now.
          
          As you guys may know, since I've said this before, the TFR books are rated "Mature" on Wattpad, but I firmly believe they would have a "Teen" rating in actual book terms. They have violence, some chapters can get pretty gory, and the characters will drop some language --not frequently, but it happens.
          
          On top of that, there's the new warning I put up, which is more crucial to the first book than others, and it regards the sensitive subject of mental health. So, if you didn't know, there are descriptions of depression, anxiety, and hallucinations. Then there are some allusions or elaborate metaphors that can be drawn from Kita's story, for better or worse.
          
          So, now that that's covered, I feel obligated to ask. Do you guys have experience with cases like this? Also, have any of you, who might've skimmed through the first TFR book, noticed these themes and were bothered by them? Was this a common thread I didn't notice, or was this anonymous poster (with all due respect and no judgment) just a more sensitive case that I didn't plan for? More importantly, did you guys find something else that should've come with a warning that the "Mature" rating doesn't cover?

RavenAkuma

@Jenni_thewolffaunus Yeah I'm also too used to those themes (irl and in writing), and I do try to avoid going too far like that, but when I get close to that point I mark the chapter. Thought that was good enough, but I guess not. Anyway, thanks for sharing
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Jenni_thewolffaunus

@RavenAkuma thankfully I’ve never had something like that happen. But I think it’s because my books are pretty vanilla lol. Though to be sure I don’t have a case like that I went ahead and marked any warnings in my Adam story. 
            
            Anyway I wasn’t really bothered by those themes in your story. Maybe it’s because I’ve dealt with anxiety and depression most of my life it doesn’t bother me too much to read it. Unless it’s like super violent or a character, shall we say, “unalives” themself. 
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RavenAkuma

*By "cases like this" I meant being a writer who gets called out for not having a warning*
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RavenAkuma

Can I get your guys' opinion, real quick?
          
          I need to know which of these names you like for a black cat with a dark gray underside/tail!
          
          Leiyt      (pronounced "light," nickname of my character)
          Ozzy      (after Ozzy Osbourne, one of my favorite singers)
          Shy        (nickname of another character)
          Ravn     (Norwegian for "Raven")
          Snape   (after the Harry Potter character)

RavenAkuma

Oh, and it's a male
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