Psychic_Mortal

Here comes a wave meant to wash me away
          	A tide that is taking me under...
          	Swallowing sands, left with nothing to say
          	My voice drowned out in the thunder...
          	
          	SPEECHLESS FROM ALADDIN.... Sorry, I had no other way to intrigue you into this message...
          	
          	Hi people,
          	Hope all are doing good! So this is to inform you about the story that I'm working on currently, 'My Hyena' and it would be great if you check it out and give me your suggestions. I am an amateur writer and it would be cool if you could give me few tips on how to enhance my writing style. I've got a short segment from my story for you, read it and if you find it interesting don't hesitate to read further...
          	
          	"You've been hiding this from me all these days? That's not at all like you Ms.Tessana!" Mario yelled.
          	
          	"Hiding what?" 
          	
          	"THAT YOU'VE GOT A BOYFRIEND!" 
          	
          	My goodness, he needs to be admitted in an asylum immediately!
          	
          	"What's wrong with you!?"
          	
          	"What's wrong with me?" he said pointing himself.
          	
          	Isn't pretty obvious that he had lost his last braincell?
          	
          	"Take a look at this!" he screamed pointing an article on the newspaper which said "Teen girl saved from a mishap of losing her life by her boyfriend! Life can be clueless but love can't!" with a picture of me being saved from the truck, by that wierdo!
          	
          	What the heck!?
          	https://www.wattpad.com/story/219598663

pmick4

Reading my hyena. I wrote a trilogy, then added a 4th book to the series. Check them out if you can. Appreciate any feedback. Thanks.

pmick4

@Psychic_Mortal appreciate the vote ✌
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Psychic_Mortal

@pmick4 Hey thanks for leaving a message! Will surely read your triology! ✨
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Psychic_Mortal

Here comes a wave meant to wash me away
          A tide that is taking me under...
          Swallowing sands, left with nothing to say
          My voice drowned out in the thunder...
          
          SPEECHLESS FROM ALADDIN.... Sorry, I had no other way to intrigue you into this message...
          
          Hi people,
          Hope all are doing good! So this is to inform you about the story that I'm working on currently, 'My Hyena' and it would be great if you check it out and give me your suggestions. I am an amateur writer and it would be cool if you could give me few tips on how to enhance my writing style. I've got a short segment from my story for you, read it and if you find it interesting don't hesitate to read further...
          
          "You've been hiding this from me all these days? That's not at all like you Ms.Tessana!" Mario yelled.
          
          "Hiding what?" 
          
          "THAT YOU'VE GOT A BOYFRIEND!" 
          
          My goodness, he needs to be admitted in an asylum immediately!
          
          "What's wrong with you!?"
          
          "What's wrong with me?" he said pointing himself.
          
          Isn't pretty obvious that he had lost his last braincell?
          
          "Take a look at this!" he screamed pointing an article on the newspaper which said "Teen girl saved from a mishap of losing her life by her boyfriend! Life can be clueless but love can't!" with a picture of me being saved from the truck, by that wierdo!
          
          What the heck!?
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/219598663