Naomi Flores

Please update soon !!!! It’s really good !!!!!

@cks10491 Okay, I have read Naomi your story and heres some things we think might help you.
          
          Your first line in your first chapter needs to raise questions in the reader’s mind and make them curious or hint at trouble/conflict. This is not an insult to your first line, but something to help you think so you can grab your readers attention, something to pull in readers and keep them.
          
          Your chapter transitions are fine, but when you end one and go on to another, make it so you leave the reader wanting more or left with curiosity as to what is to happen next or even a cliffhanger. 
          
          It never hurts to let your character think. Give your character a paragraph to think, to do things and to get from one place to another. But not too much, though. Think of it like turning on a sharp corner; you want to slow down, not come to a complete stop. 
          
          Here's another thing. Be careful with what you go into detail with. As a writer, you want to explain things to your reader so they can understand better, but some things are unnecessary. Does it relate to your story? Will it be important in future events? Is that what the reader really needs to focus on? Or can it be left as a minor detail? It's hard, we know, but these are things you have to keep in mind when writing. 
          
          Other than that, my sister liked your story and we believe you can do great things with it. We both hope you continue it as well. We wish you luck, amigo.

@cks10491 i will read it to Naomi and we will see what we can do for you. 

@cks10491 this is her sister, Veronica. She asks what it is you need help with?

Omg you're bio is everything 

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          I publish my new story "Anime Wallpaper" c:
          I hope you like it♡
          Sorry for the inconvenience
          

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Okay so I've got about like 81 hundred words and I was wondering if that's good enough for you guys? I want to write more but I have 'no' idea what to put next. @BloodyBatty you were very helpful. I wasn't able to bring in Sasuke or Kakashi because they're off training somewhere, but I was able to work an idea from it and I hope you like it.

Thank u sooo much for the follow!