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Hi

Wattpads new thing is trippy 

I’m gonna enter when light falls into the wattys2018

Hi, my name is Dee and I'm 18 years old, My native language is Hebrew but I decided to try something different and write in English. I know that at first I will have some spelling mistakes but I'm definitely want to learn from them and I'll get better with the time. I'd be glad if you'll write me anywhere I have a grammar mistake or just share with me some tips. also, ill be happy to meet some new friends. 
          
          my story: Raven- https://www.wattpad.com/story/147121366-raven

No problem 

I read a couple of your stories. To be honest, the sentence structure might work for poetry. I can't say that I enjoyed it.
          
          My head hurts trying to work your puzzles of paragraphs. I couple of times, I misread it. If I misread it, so can others.
          
          Periods help us, the readers, understand what is told in the story. If the sentences run on together, the readers will read it differently than the writer. And that is the point that I wanted to address.
          
          Also I commented a couple of suggestions that helps.

@Lithiumstories21
          
          Thanks for following me!