GentleHandsome

My science fiction novel, Ketty's Subdivision is here on Wattpad for free of your interested.

My pleasure.
          
          My point of view: I think the story would sound better in 3rd person.
          At the moment it have that feel of watching a play vs a movie and I suspect it is because you are writing it in 1st person.
          I like how you portray drew the characters personalities, at is at the level of Douglas Hill.
          1 issue I didn't get, the protagonist is an elite solder and is yet taken without a fight to show that.

Hey! Thanks for taking the time to read ARC10. I hope you'll come back and finish the rest sometime. 
          
          Just so you know, I update every Monday, Wednesday, Friday, and Saturday. 
          
          Looking forward to seeing you around 

Thanks for your votes on my stories. Hope you're enjoying them. :) 

You're welcome sir. Your work has been my pleasure. 

Hey!  I am finally getting caught up and wanted to thank you for reading and voting for Derelict.
          
          I appreciate it and FYI, if you're on the prowl for other good reads, you might check out The Seven Sleepers by @mchawkinsauthor.  Really good stuff!  
          
          Thanks again.

Hello, GentleHandsome!
          
          I just wanted to say thank you for checking out and even voting for the Foreword and Chapter 1 of The Ascent. I appreciate everyone who takes the time to read one of my stories and I really hope you enjoy it. It was a lot of fun adapting an event from ancient history to a futuristic setting.
          
          Since every reading list it is added to and every vote and comment helps with the story's ranking and helps other people discover this story as well,  I usually ask readers to vote for each chapter. But I really appreciate the comments. I love to hear what my readers think and I'm always looking for ways to improve my stories.

Hi GH! Thanks for sticking with Founders. I'm still working on the last chapter of book 1, but hope to have it posted soon. Please let me know if it dragged or lost your attention in places, or if you spot any glaring plot holes / flaws. Much appreciated! Gray:)

Thanks for your votes on FOUNDERS. I see you're from Cape Town -- I was born there too, but moved to the US as a kid. Got a scene rattling around in my mind for book two where I'm picturing Table Mountain as a perfect backdrop. Thanks again for dropping by! Gray

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