@Nabawanukadiana hi, your work is very interesting but there ars a few things you could do to improve to reach more audience.
Firstly is your sentences, they're longer then they need to be, shorten them to make it easier to read.
Secondly, I recommend editing your work to correct spellings and misuse of spaces etc (Google docs is free, word etc) it will make your story more readable.
Another one is a new cover certainly keeps people interested if you're wanting to reach more people with your story, which has potential to be something great! I recommend Canva (free), or photoshop (paid).
Lastly is to just keep experimenting and trying new ways of writing, read a book, watch a movie, go outside and write things down that give you inspiration, this is what worked best for me, study others to help yourself, self teaching is a powerful tool :)
Good luck to you!
