Hi, I read a comment of you asking for feed back on your story, I would recommend you start the story off with more detail and context, because you started on she was going to something like party, I think you should start it off with, like who she is and maybe the other characters. I was quite confused reading the first chapter. But if you don’t wanna start it with who she is, definitely introduce her slowly in the next chapters. Just remember to include good detail and context!! :) hope this helped!