Thehopeinthedark85

I am grateful for your time in reading and voting on my story. Thank you 

Bupperdupper

Don't think of it as a mistake! We gradually get better at writing over time, so of course there's always room to improve! 
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Thehopeinthedark85

@Thehopeinthedark85
            Its my first time writing a story.
            Thank you for explaining the methods to change my mistakes. 
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Bupperdupper

@Thehopeinthedark85 Was happy to read it! If I can offer a bit of advice, I think it would help being a little more descriptive in your writing, like when she is having a nightmare, tell the reader more about the murderer- in horror the more you can engage the senses of the reader, the more immersive and scary it will be! 
            It also helps to put us in the boots of the character, so maybe on top of directly writing that she's scared, you could describe her scared *reaction* to the threat, like ''the hair on the back of her neck stood'' or something of the sort. 
            
            Just a suggestion though! Keep up the good work
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