BornAgainFanGirl

Why don't people leave comments? Will someone please read my Sex on Ice story and tell me what's wrong with it? I can't progress to writing something better till I know what I'm doing wrong. Thanks.

WriterInTheCloset

There’s nothing wrong with it
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lostlovefairy

“You can’t hold me like that and not kiss me,” whispered Vinaya, her face an inch away from his, his strong arms wrapped around her small body. 
          
          “I can’t, Yaya,” he said in his deep voice, “You are Mohan’s sister. His friendship means too much to me to do this.” His mind was a whirlwind of emotions that threatened to cloud his judgment. 
          
          “More than I do?” She asked, closing the gap between their lips.
          
          Tropes
          Forbidden love
          Height difference 
          Forced proximity
          Brother’s bestfriend 
          Age gap (6yrs)
          
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/357148529?utm_source=ios&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details&wp_uname=lostlovefairy&wp_originator=yBIpUPTLiMJ4DSCR6hi3aKLke0Pi0kEsT4cT%2FgXGJf9l7YoXoLqFBDUkZjrZn45qwIj8xpE2lyn2R8CRvdM41R69eFZeX%2BwD5kDet5yDNOn32rb6tfqXLE%2Bs5oQZiJ3c
          

Ackermans_love_420

Hey thanks for the follow!

Ackermans_love_420

@BornAgainFanGirl Hope you like TTP. Lmk what you think.
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Ackermans_love_420

@BornAgainFanGirl GASP! Thanks!! She's my best friend hahaha. I love that bitch.
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BornAgainFanGirl

Magpie I meant. Stupid editors
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magpiequeen444

Hey I owe you a chapter and some comments sweetie. I've been so bananas getting back to school I'm waaay behind. I hope you're doing well. I think about you all the time and I love you!

BornAgainFanGirl

@magpiequeen444 yeah kind of stuck on where to go now what's my last chapter but it'll hit me.
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