BlueSweet1234

oh look! it's a new chapter! it totally hasn't been four months since i last updated my book...
          	
          	https://www.wattpad.com/870240448-the-ventures-of-hazel-hurst-chapter-six-jean

BlueSweet1234

oh look! it's a new chapter! it totally hasn't been four months since i last updated my book...
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/870240448-the-ventures-of-hazel-hurst-chapter-six-jean

BlueSweet1234

yeahhh, i’m trying to get on here at least once a week and it’s kinda been working. but thanks!!  <3
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SilverBell96

@BlueSweet1234 
            Lol! XD
             Its fineeee. For me, anyway...^^"
            I not on here much anymore, obviously. So I'm just NOW seeing this. ^^" XD
              But yeah, I'll get to reading it real soon, sweet! ❤❤
            (I only came on for a quick visit, to see if anything was actually going on.^^")
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BlueSweet1234

so i’ve been reading about the whole ‘show don’t tell’ concept, and after going through some of my chapters i noticed something: i say facts when what i should be saying is how they/she felt. so, ‘show don’t tell’ is ‘emotions not facts.’ or at least for me...
          
          and yeah, just though i would put this here in case anyone needed help with this concept.

BlueSweet1234

as for the amazing troupe of the mindless banter kids? they were going on adventures through the snow-filled woods!!

BlueSweet1234

yeahhhh, it’s not really supposed to make sense. i was just bored while writing and that was the first thing that came up my mind
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SilverBell96

@BlueSweet1234 
            Huh..? I'm confused...
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BlueSweet1234

eeeelongated eeeeeeeeees

BlueSweet1234

yes, i am having a lot of fun hereeeee. weeeeeeeee!!
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SilverBell96

@BlueSweet1234 
             Lol! XD Having fun there?
              *puzzles thoughtfully*
               ...should I elongate my "e"s, so u can understand wat I'm saying? :O
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BlueSweet1234

so i rewrote the scene where Oliver and George give Hazel her (now favorite) bracelet and posted it in an inline comment. (chapter five - hibernation)
          
          also here's the quote (?) that i linked it to:
          
          Turning towards Hazel Oliver explained “Hazel, I have something to give you as a birthday gift. Also to thank you for coming with me on the expedition.”

SilverBell96

@BlueSweet1234 
            Hmm... "held" could work. It doesn't really give the implication of action, but its definitely less rough than "grabbed". Lol ^^
               Do u think "scooped up" could work..? Course, that includes the "up" word again... *shrugs* XD
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BlueSweet1234

@SilverBell96 oooo, yeah, i hadn't realized that until you said it but i think it would sound better if i changed it to something other than 'grabbed.' do you think 'held' would work? because i already use 'picked up' later in the paragraph.
            but thank youu!
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BlueSweet1234

does anyone know if the word "ya'" (as in 'you') was used back in the 1800s? X'D

BlueSweet1234

@SilverBell96 haha yeah, i'll look into the rest of my not-so-developed characters so that i won't have to rewrite too much. like, Reubin or York.
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SilverBell96

@BlueSweet1234 
             Yeah, I know wat u mean. ;) 
              As for character accents: that's where ur gonna have to decide wat race ur characters are. XD Race differences often affects accent. Especially in those days, when races were just starting to really mingle. But if u check up on those characters who already had a race identity, then u can probably get a quick idea of wat they're accent wouldve been. Check to see where they were born, and where they grew up. Particularly where they grew up. Altho different raced parents could also potentially affect ones accent. ;) :)
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BlueSweet1234

@SilverBell96 haha yeah, but i'm talking about using "ya'" as in 'yeah.' like, hmm, "ya' know" instead of  "you know" does that make sense. but like, now i wanna give someone an accent, i don't know which character would suit an accent though. XD
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BlueSweet1234

hi! so first off i'm going to say: Merry Christmas/Happy Hanukkah to all who celebrate those holidays!! second:
          
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/117061688-chatnapped-miraculous-fanfiction-%E2%9C%94%EF%B8%8F
          
          okay, this is pretty much my favorite book on Wattpad and is also THE reason that i created this account. it's just a really, really, really, good book. now, there are only three chapters out right now because @kukapudding is rewriting it. but she's rewriting it so amazingly (is that a word?) that i had to put it on here! so, if you have the time, please read her book. thank you!!!

BlueSweet1234

XD alright, i guess it should stay there
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SilverBell96

@BlueSweet1234 
            XD Lol
             Idk either, but it kinda fits. I read it properly. Lol ;) ^^
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BlueSweet1234

@SilverBell96 
            i have no idea how that last exclamation point got there
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