MiMi

Okay, you've given our main characters problems, goals, and wishes, making them more relatable. Amazing. But to be honest, although this is a spirit-enriching book, I'll get bored soon if there's no conflict or something to get my heart pumping. I don't know what you've planned for this story, but I've seen some Christian books where there's no conflict, no substantial plot, and no resolution—just Christian living and Christian living. I don't know if you've already planned a humongous conflict that'll probably make me cry my eyeballs out, but if there's no conflict, nor any change, nor anything at all to visibly shake the protagonist(s) to the core, well, your readers might dwindle.
          
          I also noticed that your blurb is not really much of a blurb. We only have a lovely short bit of a Bible verse, an excerpt from the story, and a short bit about who Abby is. That's all. When future readers stumble across your book, they see your cover. They might absolutely love your cover. But your blurb doesn't show anything promising—doesn't show the specific, significant conflict Abby would face, doesn't show any mystery, and doesn't make the readers ask, "I wonder what would happen." There's no hook in the blurb whatsoever, so I'll need your perspective and cooperation here. What do you think would make your blurb better? 

Your story is beautiful, and I love the fact it's like a way to bring people closer to God. It shows us relatable things and I can bet I can 90% relate to Cal, Christie, and Abby. They're all like little parts of me and seeing them facing the same struggles I'm facing prompts me to read more of your book to see how they handle their problems. 
          
          Alright, you have me hooked because of the relatablity of your characters; although, not everyone would be hooked by your story. I assume your book is a means to reach out to people and get them to rely on God more and become closer to Him. But the painful fact is that not everyone desires to be close with God. So, in order for you to keep those kind of people reading your story while still maintaining the central theme, there has to be an even stronger hook. You get what I mean? You need a strong hook that gets them to stay, even if it's a Christian book. I'm telling you, if you make a stronger hook for even the unbelievers, God can use you to change their lives. You just have to have the right hook.

@born_of_Him Oh yes ofc!! Any feedback is greatly appreciated :D Also, I’m glad to hear that you’re doing well!! Each good day is definitely a blessing from God, and sometimes it’s so easy to forget that

@BlackBeanandChestnut, I've been doing great by God's grace, thanks for asking. You asked me to read your book, and I had finished reading it a long while ago, but I forgot to tell you what I thought about it. Can I tell you now? 

Hey! Remember me? 

 Hey there!
          
          I noticed you’ve been active in Jesus Club in the past, and I just wanted to let you know that a new chapter is out now! ✨
          
          Would love for you to check it out and see what you think. Your support and thoughts always mean so much!
          
           Hope to see you there!
          – Glorygirl102

Hey Mimi, how are you doing? 

Hi there please help me check out my new book and drop a comment...
          https://www.wattpad.com/story/390662264?utm_source=android&utm_medium=link&utm_content=story_info&wp_page=story_details_button&wp_uname=Debbie_oye

Hello, I was wondering if you're interested in a genuine r4r?

You deserve a follow! I like your bio!