@ParanormalGeek Hey, I read your story! It's really good. From the very beginning I was drawn in. I especially love how descriptive and suspenseful the prologue is. I did notice, however, that at some point in the very beginning you switched from past tense to present tense, but it hasn't happened since. There are very few spelling and grammar mistakes, which is refreshing. When Nessa was on the plane, I wish you'd described how it was that she knew the guy a couple rows up was working for her mother; a symbol on him? His look? Does she have an ability to sense these things? A little clarification was needed there IMHO. The rest of the story uses the right amount of clarification though. It explains enough while keeping up the suspense. The story is engaging and it stayed interesting so far. This is a high quality story. Having read literally hundreds of books, this sounds like a book I'd find in the library. I'm not even that into supernatural stories, but I'm definitely going to continue reading this. Thanks for sharing your story with me! Keep writing!
Alyson
