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@beauty_wid_brain i know you're now writing it so you've probably not edited but us you have free time then there's a good amount of grammatical errors, sentence structure issues and few spelling mistakes to take a look at. Also, idk if you were going for a cliche storyline or not but it's some parts don't add up to me that is if you're not going for a cliche story. For example, she's a little judgemental assuming people's looks been natural or plastic. For someone who's been through bad shit she easily trusts a new guy and goes on a road trip with him, also, her brother seems pretty chill abt it that's if he even knows Some stuff Eva says don't make any solid sense...