First {revised}

please vote for me as this is my first ever time joining a contest like this!!!!!!!!!
and i would really appreciate it
*story in revision*
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Ashly Parker is you're normal school girl though she's,shy, um shy and very very innocent... she would rather stay one the bleachers and blend in instead of stand out
Rider Elliot was the new kid expelled from many schools because he was 'hard to handle' as he puts it and he's growing tired of the things he does
but what happens when he starts to take a liking to a certain good girl?...