Love and life discussions

In the wake of their new victory in wano, time spilled into the hands of Luffy and Nami. Recognition of their silent feelings whaled in their hearts like aches---cracking them bit by bit tempting each-other with glances and touches until they gave into their desires, drowning in them.

just read it and give me some advice, sorry if this isn't to ur liking. This is my first time writing something like this !!
(attention!! some stuff in this fanfic is different from the manga/anime itself!)