Lets take a look in hell.....

Hi guys :) So this is the first story I've ever written. Please tell me if I have any grammar mistakes or anything. Criticism is a good thing. I'm sure it would help me become better as a writer. Any suggestions or comments, just comment.... This story has many character with 2 families...one family is unknown with the truth of second family.... this story has mature contain.. Hope you will like this.... I'm just 16

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