Lord Voldemort's Request

Okay, so this isn't an actual story. I had to write this for an English Assessment and thought I'd upload it here cause my teacher isn't very good at feedback and I really want to improve.
This is a rewrite of Chapter Twenty - Lord Voldemort's Request - from Harry Potter and the Half Blood Prince.
Constructive Criticism is welcomed for tea and biscuits as is any other words of encouragement. Flames will be used to warm up the kettle :)
Thanks :)
~ Cherilyn-Rose x