ᵇᵃⁿᵃⁿᵃ ᵇʳᵉᵃᵈ

I really like the sing Banana Bread by cavetown, so I thought that I would make a little short story inspired by it. I'm trying to make it as close to the song as possible. I would really love it if you would comment on things that you like about this story and maybe give some constructive criticism.