1. Home is Not Where the Heart is

With an abnegation life haunted by shadows, Mare fights to find a way out. In a desperate attempt to escape her father she ends up in dauntless, trying to prove to everyone that she is brave. But with her life crumbling around her and people watching her every move, is it too little, too late?

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