Wow It's Edgy

Um, Tell me if its half decent I guess? I prefer constructive criticism, but I'll probably get flamed anyway, so be courteous, I suppose? I'd appreciate comments. Thanks! (Note: Please don't copy this and hand it in for school, that's dumb, and will never help you out in the end. Not that I'm saying this is amazing and will get you 100%, grades will waver from teacher to teacher; I'm merely poking fun at the fact that making something dark and edgy will usually get yourself a good grade.)