On the road to planeptune part.1

hi this is my first fanfic and im not good at this type of stuff so if you have any tips please share that would help me out alot thx but the story is about one of my ocs name shadow he is a Cpu he is 16 years old not really but he is young forever but he does not care how old he is with white hair his weapons a gun in one hand and a long sword in the other hand he is a cpu in work so he cant transform but he is working on it hope you like what i came up with im going to try to get better shadow can be a little rude but hes nice and later he starts to like nepgear but as a friend but then he starts to feel feelings he never felt and he starts to see hes in love./UPDATE-Sorry i need to post more but its goig to be a little bit harder becuase i just started high school so i hope you understand thanks..../UPDATE 2 truly thank you i never thought i would keep going and there was times i was thinking of just stopping but thanks to everyone i kept it going ^-^